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After getting my peer review, some changes i'd like to make are adding more quotes from the modern version of Charlie and The Chocolate Factory. I spoke a lot more about the original movie, Willy Wonka and The Chocolate Factory.I also need to add in-text citations with my writing. I'd also like to reorganize my structure by taking away some sentences within the first and second paragraphs that were repeated very similarly too many times. There wasn't any misinterpreted logic in the corrections she gave.

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