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Action Plan

Kirstyn Marsh
ENC2315

     Based on the feedback I received, I plan on making my ideas more clear so that my audience understands why Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory and Charlie and the Chocolate Factory are fantasy films. I also didn't realized that I used very contradicting words in the same sentence that could potentially confuse the reader. I plan on revisiting these sentences and making adjustments so that they are more clear. In addition, not regarding my feedback, I plan on making the "what if" part of my draft more clear so that my essay actually has a purpose. There was only one piece of feedback that I was unsure about and that was the use of my words in which the reviewer of my essay did not recognize. She suggested that I replace them with simpler words, however, I feel as if that was just a matter of her opinion. I believe most people would recognize the words I used.

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